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The Charming

Grandfather pulls the netting
Over my face, then his, and
turns up my cheek thirty degrees.
There are fifty shades of amber
to sip but hundreds of suicide
workers willing to sting you.

His eyes leave mine hungry
with anticipation, hands hot
for the sweet tack.
I follow the gloom of smoke
and think to myself
they can smell it, fear
and step to the side
of Grandfather’s beehive.

I dream of honey,
in slow sticky rivers that drift
and shape to my tongue like edible gloves.
The absolute sweetness,
the musk of the bees brushing petals
and stealing away to craft the nectar,
the true golden mean.

Their combs hiding my treasure in
measured pockets, hexagrams holding
the secret to happiness:
worth risking the poison
to garner the prize.

One breath from the can,
the spicy smoke of smoldering
peppermint leaves releases
the swarm for meager moments.
Grandfather gathers the comb with
deliberate grace and hands it to me.
The charming is over.

He winks a wrinkled eye and whispers:
This is the gift of patience, child. Savor the sweet
‘cause life aint nothin’ but bitter.
©2005-2009 ~laurapalmer
:iconlaurapalmer:

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grandad...

Daily Deviation

Given 2006-08-03

The Charming by ~laurapalmer is an image that captures a wonderful moment, leaving you feeling nostalgic. (Suggested by `xork and Featured by `imperfect)

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:iconjulyshelied:
each of these stanzas could be an awesome poem on their own
I hope this doesn't sound clich(insert e with accent here), but your imagery is amazing
honey

love this

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Come down to my room
I was thinking about you
and made a pass at myself
:iconlaurapalmer:
Thanks so much. This was a fun poem to write.

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I am the muffin.
:iconxork:
What Lauren said. Amazing work.

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Thebes: The cyborg would not recognize the Garden of Eden; it is not made of mud and cannot dream of returning to dust.
:iconlaurapalmer:
Thanks! I wrote this for my poetry class last semester. It's funny, it isn't one of my favorites, but other people respond to it really well...I'm glad because it is one of my lighter poems. Again thanks so much for the comments!

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I am the muffin.
:iconmissmidge:
The imagery really is amazing - well done. The description is just so good! ^^ And the pearl of wisdom from the grandfather seems like such a grandfather-y thing to say. (Congrats on the DD.)

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miss midge
:icontearstone:
"worth risking the poison
to garner the prize."

is my personal favourite. Good work.

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~Coffeehouse had your mum last night
:iconparentheses:
That's a very beautiful poem.

Their combs hiding my treasure in
measured pockets, hexagrams holding
the secret to happiness:
worth risking the poison
to garner the prize.


Definitely my favourite part. And congratulations on the DD, well-deserved! :)
:icontippytappy:
oh so very lovely :heart:
:iconlena-hyena:
Sweet, thick and beautiful :)
Wonderfully described moment with vivid details, and an awesome title.

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He kissed me awake, and no one was sorry
:iconpinocchio-liez:
Very descriptive...nostalgic definitely. But at first glance my thought was completely different on the theme of this poem. This piece is very well done...crafted very well around the central theme of a childhood hero. Beautifully done!

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May God help me if I ever have to use my art...:blackrose:

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